whenever i write, most of my stuff sounds like emo, although i don't intend it to be, it just comes out that way. need to work on that. anyway, here's one of mine.
"Just Be Yourself" (6-15-03)
Diffidence dominates your mind,
And you assemble more and more lies.
You're insecure of revealing your essence,
Because I can just see it in your eyes.
How you talk and how you act,
Definitely hiding something behind your back.
Afraid of divulging the truth to the world,
You build up your defenses for attack.
You got yourself into this mess,
You pretty much messed up yourself.
The mirror reflects a fool back to you,
And all you really had to do was just be yourself.
You left a bad impression inside you,
Stop pretending to be someone you're not.
Keep on going the way you're going,
Your mentality is gonna continue to rot.
You can only go for so long,
Until you've realized everyone's left you.
Look at all the time you've wasted,
Vanity touched whatever you tried to do.
very nice pete! I really liked "The mirror reflects a fool back to you,
And all you really had to do was just be yourself." Very awsum line babe :)
thanks! :D
you know what's so weird? I was going to write a poem about someone I know that's just like that. Maybe now I don't need to...or maybe I should still write my take on it. Since I'm seeing it through different eyes.
go for it, i'd like to see your view on it. your poem "I Die" was really good.
This reminds me or "Everything to Everyone" by Everclear and "Acoustic #3" by the Goo Goo Dolls.
i don't listen to them, is my poem very alike to their songs?
Um, nooo. You definitely don't sound like you're imitating them. The theme of his poem is just the same: She's [I assume its a guy talking to a girl] so busy trying to create a false persona , instead of being herself, she's turned herself into someone that's going down fast. But the reason is probably b/c she doesn't like herself, so the solution is pause for the cause and be yourself for once. That person is a lot more likeable.
More or less that's what I got out of it. But since I can't read the poem and write this at the same time, there may be some elements I've forgotten. Look up the lyrics to the other songs...even if you don't like the bands, you might appreciate the lyrics.
oh ok cool :)
I love it Pete.
you wrote this when i turned 25! That means nothing!!