"Dick"
by Hey, guys. I did very well on my first movie assignment, or so I'm told! My new assignment is due in two weeks. It's a genre project. I drew "NOIR" and I could not be happier. I love noir.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Film_noir
I was eating dinner and kinda freaking out about writing this, but it struck me before my entree came out. I wrote it down real quick and then ate. I got home and banged this out in about 25 minutes.
Please, let me know what you's think! Any input would be great. If I see any TL;DR posts, I'm gonna hand out nooses, so you can hang yourself. THANKS!
boy: dick, private investigator
girl: dick's girl
scene 1
girl: you didn't answer the phone
boy: doll, you KNOW i'm busy. this case... i told you about it... you understand?
girl: so, you don't answer the phone?
boy: not this one. not lately. i've been pretty focused. you know the more time that passes, the less likely we are to find a living person. this mr. wallace is paying me very well to find his wife and the money... it can't hurt.
girl: maybe this disappearing girl thing is contagious. hope i don't catch it.
boy: put yourself in my shoes: would YOU need this kind of guff right now?!
girl: all i need is you, dick.
boy: that's sweet. [doesn't look up. doesn't smile]
scene 2 [days later]
girl: are you ready?
boy: doll! i found her! the missing wallace girl.
girl: should i be jealous? are you taking her to dinner now and not me?
boy: no, no, no! but get this: she doesn't want to be found. she ran away.
girl: from you?
boy: from her husband. i tracked her to a drive hotel just outside of town. i approached her and she immediately knew her husband sent me. she begged me to let her go and forget i ever found her. she says her husband is and i quote, "very, very evil."
girl: looks like a closed case to me, dick.
boy: i don't know what to do.
scene 3 [days later]
boy: so, doll, here's the thing... this wallace girl. she's in big trouble. she said he'd kill her if he ever found her. turns out this guys a real dirtwad. a psycho wiseguy. drugs, booze, gambling. she wants out. [looks scared] if this guy finds out about all this... i don't know what he'll do to her... to me.
girl: looks like you better wash your hands.
boy: i can't just feed her to this guy! isn't everyone allowed a second shot? [beat] i'm gonna set her up at my place for a while...
girl: the hell you are!
boy: it's already decided. i'm picking her up in two hours. it's life or death.
girl: this is dangerous on so many levels, dick! i won't lose you over some runaway broad! when did you get so soft?!
boy: when did you get so hard?
scene 4 [same night]
our girl, alone, crying, in the dark, on the phone: mr. wallace? is this mr. wallace? yes. i think i know where your wife is.
scene 5 [11 hours later]
car. trunk open. two bodies inside. dick and mrs. wallace. mr. wallace closes the trunk. drives away.
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I'm looking foward to being Mr. Wallace!
not bad not bad!! i like it. I read it with "film noir" voices in my head ha
This makes me want to go home and watch "The Maltese Falcon" and "The Big Sleep". Whoever plays the boy has to talk super fast and smart-mouthed like Bogart.
Is this just a portion of the movie? Who's the villain?
wow! that's what i was channeling! dashiell hammett! good eye.
this is a 5 minute short. the girl ends being the villian and selling out her boy [dick] and the runaway wife. neglect and jealousy being her reasons.
anything else you wanna tell me? you know your stuff.
Ooh, so the girl is the bad guy, huh? I love that. You know the scene in "The Maltese Falcon" where Bogart totally interrogates the girl at the end? What I love about that movie is that we get to the end thinking Bogart trusts this girl, then he shows how he really feels and gives it to her.
I found the script
Check out pages 148-150; that's the scene. The text in the movie turned out a little different, but I love this exchange:
Brigid (staring with terrified eyes): Don't - don't talk to me like that, Sam. You know I didn't... you know --
Spade: Stop it! (he glances at the clock) The police will be blowing in any minute. Talk!
Brigid: (Puts the back of her hand to her forehead) Oh, why do you accuse me of such terrible...?
Spade: (very low - impatient) This isn't the time for that school girl act, with both of us standing under the gallows! ...
It's such a great scene. I love the way she plays with him until she realizes she can't get out of his accusations, then gets totally stiff and professional. Such good acting.
TL;DR
Ian I am mad at this :P
This mess is off the hook, shoooooot LOL! But seriously he's got a great concept.
of all people... you? NOOSE!
I'd watch this if scarlet johanssen was the girl, jessica alba was the runaway girl. I was the private. And instead of the girl killing me and jessica.. we all go to disneyland and mess aroudn with goofy.. then wrestle.
i wonder why scar-jo won't return my calls. *sigh*
This reminds me too of the scene in "The Big Sleep" when Bogart goes into a bookstore, asks the lady questions and she get suspicious. She asks why he's so interested in his books, in a flirty way, and he knocks up his hat, glances down at her and says, "I'm a private dick on a case... it just so happens I've got a bottle of pretty good rye in my pocket." And the girl responds, "Well... looks like we're closed for the rest of the afternoon." I seriously want to live in the world Hammett created.
I added a few lines to the end of scene 4 to make you believe that she'd send Dick up the river with Wallace. It kinds of confirms he's cheating and would make her actions appear slightly more realistic.
b: when did you get so hard?
g: this girl... are you two...[upset]?
b: i don't have time for this [stressed].
g: w-what?
b: please go, Louise
I've been growing a 'stache for a week for my role. Sound good? Never asked you ..what age is my character? And what's his appearance supposed to be like?
i'm itching to do something like this. let me know if i can audition
awesome. i'll let you know.
so is dick's girl working for mr. wallace?
nah, she just rats out dick for helping mrs wallace, sending them both to their death by mr wallace's hand
Here's the finished product. My second movie. Wayyy different from what I'd intended to do. I didn't get the location I wanted and my lead guy didn't show. I ended up shooting it in the back of a coffee shop and I had to play the role of Dick myself. I was quite unprepared, but I had fun. S'all that matters. Check it out.
alright man! great job!
haha sweet!! amy winehouse!!yes!!
i would have liked more shadows and lighting type things.. next time let me know, perhaps my lights and your camera can make.. action? haha
as expected, you did noir justice. excellent job, bri!
very cool dude, you got it done!
This totally reminds me of the big sleep
Having seen both of the two projects couldn't be more proud! Both efforts had a unique flavor all their own. You've got a great cinematic eye =)
Love the music for this one as well.
"guff" what a word. delightful movie though. little incest though.
Oh, hush
wow bri, im totally impressed!!! thats some hot stuff right there!
Nice! I like your technique of talking to the camera when talking to the girl; very interesting.
is it me? or are you not accepting ez messages?
I got one a couple days ago... That's an Ian question.
yeah he's right. your name isn't showing up. i'll fix it tonight
It looks like rob put on weight for this role
Donovan and I agreed, as we were watching "The Big Sleep" the other night, that we'd love to act for you if you ever make a sequel. :)
Oh my. I'll have to see about that, lol. Dono would look cool in a fedora. You'd have to be some kinda femme fatale.
I think we all agreed already the fedora and I are one
This line of comments made me laugh I used to have this friend I was sure was
the reason that the Fedora was invented, such a cutie! I luv a suave guy in a nice Fedora...true story.
R. Kelly?
OMG how'd you know?!?!? Gotta keep it on the DL yo!
I don't know... Donovan's got a lot of three piece suits, I bought him a silver pocket watch, he's got two-toned spats, and he looks pretty hot with all those pieces and his fedora...