I had to read it twice, for some reason I needed to to go over it again to make the connection between characters-I don't know why, it was pretty clear. I liked the intro the best. And a side note, was the frosted flakes cartoon Tony the Tiger???
Yes he was..but when I started writing it I didn't plan on it being a Tiger..I just kind of wrote.
So you were basically tring to BAMBOOSLE the reader into thinking this kid's dad was in jail...and then, bam, the plot twists as the story ends & you find out he's a zoo keeper....
Um..yes, that's pretty much what I was going for.
I wonder if anybody else picked that up....(oh & a lil side note, could you stop posting excerpts from my autobiography & calling them your stories)
Your dad's best friend was in jail but really ended up being a tiger?
It's a very long story..You seem to have posted the condensed version here to pasify our shorter attention spans....The real story includes swash-buckling action, damselles in distress, a mime afflicted w/asthma, murder, betrayal, and two dozen blueberry muffins.....