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She Danced with Me

mrenticon by mrenticon · Apr 4, 2002 · 127 views · Journal

I choked on my words a little

   but she said, 'Yes.'

I took her soft hand

   and led her to the crowded floor.

A quiet song came on,

   one I heard she liked.

She came closer.

I put one arm around her warm body.

She put her head against my chest.


Such a serene smile.

Her eyes she kept shut.

I closed mine.

We just swayed to the music,

   but the music didn't matter.

I could stay here forever.


I memorized the moment...


Her hair smelled of flowers.

And I could feel the rhythm of her breath,

   her chest moving up and down.

I became aware of every point

   my body touched hers.

Is she trembling,

                or is that me?


I opened my eyes

   and gazed into her subtle blue stare.

Still with a smile,

   she thanked me for the dance.

'My pleasure,' I said.

I wonder if she knows

                how much I meant that?


Now when I'm with her,

   I feel a new calm from within.

All because

   she danced with me...

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12 Comments

malibu #1 malibuOG 2001

that was a really awesome poem. i loved it. they always say true emotions inspire all the best writings

flomojopoanode #2 flomojopoanodeFounder

Awesome, I loved this poem, and I know what that's like. Very nicely written--ian, do you give awards for great stuff like this?

H
#2.1 hugz4uFounder

yeah... ian gives them a big fat NOTHING! haha! you know, watching friends last night, chandler said something that reminded me of ian alot :)

mrenticon #2.1.1 mrenticonOG 2002

i miss 'friends'. haven't seen it for the past two years since i changed halls. i can't tape the episodes off the tv, so i've been 'out of the loop'...

legs #3 legsFounder

so great, i loved the poem!

C
#4 crazygirlOG 2001

wow, this was incredible. while is was reading i felt like i was there. awesome work!

mrenticon #5 mrenticonOG 2002

many humble thanks for your kind words

magnum #6 magnumOG 2001

when do i get to dance with her? :P Nice poem though.

punkprincess #7 punkprincessOG 2001

bri, i never knew you had this in you! very nice!!

mrenticon #7.1 mrenticonOG 2002

*sheepishly winks to tuna*

rocksupastar #8 rocksupastarFounder

AWESOME... i LOVE it... awesome job!

legs #8.1 legsFounder

[over usage of the word awesome]

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